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How should I finish?

ReenaReena Posts: 1,375 Wise Owl
Any ideas on how I should finish this song? It just came to me tonight.
Sounds a bit sad. :crying:

My throat is raw,
My heart is sore,
My eyes are stained
I can't do this anymore.


That's all I have so far, can't seem to find the right words. :chin:

Oops-e!

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    Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    My throat is raw, from fighting
    My heart is sore, from lying
    My eyes are stained, from crying
    I can't do this anymore.

    Your photos ripped up on the floor
    There's emptiness where love was before
    Honey, if you could see me now,
    It'd chill you to your core!
    It'd chill you to your core!

    You said the grass was greener,
    That your new life was sweeter
    You left behind,
    the simple times
    I never was a dreamer

    My throat is raw, from fighting
    My heart is sore, from lying
    My eyes are stained, from crying
    I can't do this anymore.



    And that's as far as I can get at this time in the morning, I'll do some mote later. I have a tune in my head so if my throat isn't too bad I'll do a youtube vid for you :thumb:
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    Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    Wow BA, that's pretty impressive song writing skills you have.
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    Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    It was alright for 6 in the morning I suppose :)
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    ReenaReena Posts: 1,375 Wise Owl
    WOW BA! Fab lyrics. Can I just suggest;

    My throat is raw, from shouting
    My heart is sore, from fighting
    My eyes are stained, from crying
    I can't do this anymore.

    Your photos ripped up on the floor
    There's emptiness where love was before
    Honey, if you could see me now,
    It'd chill you to your core!
    It'd chill you to your core!

    You said the grass was greener,
    That your new life was sweeter
    You left behind,
    the simple times
    I never was a dreamer

    My throat is raw, from shouting
    My heart is sore, from fighting
    My eyes are stained, from crying
    I can't do this anymore.

    And what about fitting this in somewhere?
    I just watched you walk away, slip away, fade away.

    Can't wait to hear your tune for it, want to see if it's the same as in my head. xx :wave:
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