Personal Statement

I've just written mine for university admission next year. It took a while because I had to trim five lines out of the original draft which was very hard! Anyway, I was wondering if any of you nice people would be able to take a look at it. So far only people who are subjective have taken a look and try as they might I'm sure they're not critical enough!

I would want to send it via email because I don't really want to post it here, so if you could PM me with your email address that would be cracking.