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when i've finished it, will someone read it over for me?
i'm not sure if what im writting is the right thing!!!!
i'm not sure if what im writting is the right thing!!!!
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I have previously started an Adult Nursing course with The University of Hertfordshire. I left after 18 months when I failed a module. At the time I was unsure if the course was what I wanted to do. However since leaving and working in a care home, I have realised I should not have left and would really appretiate the oppurtunity to try again.
I feel I would be a good candidate for this course because I am hard working and I get on very well with others. I can work well in a team or on my own. I am very patient and a good listener. I am not afraid of hard work and am more than willing to put on the hours I know this course needs.
I have also attended a moving and handling course as well as a first aid one. I have a certificate in Health and Safety and am currently doing a course in Decontamination and Sterilisation in the Work Place. Also in the next few weeks I will be attending a course on Dementia Care.
thats it so far. i dunno wat else to say
I have previously started an Adult Nursing course with The University of Hertfordshire. I left after 18 months when I failed a module. are you really sure you want to put in that you started and jacked it in? is there a good reason you failed? At the time I was unsure if the course was what I wanted to do. However since leaving and working in a care home, I have realised I should not have left and would really appretiate the oppurtunity to try again.
I feel I would be a good candidate for this course because I am hard working despite failing? sorry harsh, but fair to point out the apparent contradiction and I get on very well with others. I can work well in a team or on my own. I am very patient and a good listener. I am not afraid of hard work and am more than willing to put on the hours I know this course needs.Try to expand on why you think you have these qualities, or think of ones you think you'll have to have and explain why you've got them, or are working on them.
I have also attended a moving and handling course as well as a first aid one. I have a certificate in Health and Safety and am currently doing a course in Decontamination and Sterilisation in the Work Place. Also in the next few weeks I will be attending a course on Dementia Care.
thats it so far. i dunno wat else to say
Give me a minute, I'll find the drafts of my PS, and post them, then you can see the development
ETA: here they are, first and last so you can see what changed. I was going for Mech Eng, but was also on my way to the army at the time, so there's your context. Personal Statement 2 was a mates near final article, which has a different tone, she wanted to do spanish and mandarin duel honours.
Any previous qualifications that link to it? what are you doing now A-level or similar? explain about why you chose them and how it related to your course and/or why you chose them
And also talk about hobbies/other interests so that they can get a bigger idea of what you're like as a person
And also mention any other experience if you have any, it doesn't neccessarily have to be on an offocial placement, but stuff like babysitting or helping at a playgroup would look good if you'd done it, would also mean you had experience of working with different client groups
Hope this helps
thanx for the help! i shall do what you said!!
i can see what you mean about the contradiction. when i left i had personal problems (depression) which was i just couldnt face going back a year with no bursary etc. but now i have had time to work through all that.
i dunno if i should say that tho!!
i think it might be better to say 'in 2000 (or whatever year it was) i did a weeks work experience...'. dunno why maybe i'm just being picky!
also you might want to word 'I left after 18 months when I failed a module' a bit more positively. you don't have to tell them you failed. and also might be good to give examples of when you have worked well on your own as well as with others.
My interest first flourished when - aged 15 - I did a weeks' work experience in an elderly care home and immediately felt an affinity for the role and responsibilities involved. Since then I have worked for four months as a healthcare assistant at Harpenden Memorial Hospital and I am currently working in an elderly care home where I am building on my existing clinical, interpersonal and communication skills with relation to nursing and patient care. I have been in their employment for seven months and I now feel I would like to take my training further and advance my career accordingly.
I have previously embarked on an Adult Nursing Diploma course with The University of Hertfordshire. Regrettably, I left after 18 months when I began to doubt my aptitude and enthusiasm for the course and then failed a module. At the time I was unsure if the course was what I wanted to do; however since leaving and gaining fairly extensive experience in a care home, I have realised that I should not have left so hastily and would truly appreciate a second chance.
In addition to my care home and work experience, I have also attended a "Moving and Handling" and "First Aid" course. I have a certificate in Health and Safety and also one in Care Planning. I am currently undertaking a course in "Decontamination and Sterilisation in the Work Place". In addition to this certification, in the next few weeks I will also be attending a course on "Dementia Care". I feel that all this experience would be invaluable to me during my Nursing training and throughout my future career.
I feel I would be an ideal candidate for this course (and, in time, this career) due to my unwavering work ethic and ability to work well with others in all manner of situations and group dynamics. I believe I can work to the highest standards in both in a team dynamic and under my own initiative. I am a very patient person and feel I am also a very good listener with an enormous capacity for empathy and understanding ? both qualities which I believe are imperative to a nurse. I am not afraid of hard work and am more than willing to put in the time, energy and work I know this course needs.'
Briggi, you sure its ok to use that?
this one is all thanx to Briggi who has just saved me!!
i'd leave it out all together but i just know if i get an interview they'll ask me about it and say why didnt i put it on my application.
ETA: Just for the record, if I saw that in your personal statement, it'd be all that I'd remember, and there'd be NO WAY you'd be invited in for an interview, straight on the discard pile.
Apart from that it sounds pretty good. I'm just trying to invisage one thing that you may be asked. In the third paragraph I think you cover quite well the reasons for you leaving the first time. However, as someone reading this, my first question would be, 'what would stop you dropping out again? She's done it once, am I entirely convinced she won't do it again?' Forgive me for playing the Devil's advocate here but with these kind of things, you have to look at everything you say and every conceivable question they could ask you.
Apart from those little things, it does look pretty good. Good luck!
I have previously embarked on an Adult Nursing Diploma course with The University of Hertfordshire. Regrettably, I left after 18 months due to a combination of personal problems which I have since had the time and space to fully resolve. At the time I was unsure if the course was what I wanted to do; however since leaving and gaining fairly extensive experience in a care home, I have realised that nursing is my true vocation and would truly appreciate a second chance.