How should I finish?

Reena

Any ideas on how I should finish this song? It just came to me tonight.
Sounds a bit sad. :crying:

My throat is raw,
My heart is sore,
My eyes are stained
I can't do this anymore.

That's all I have so far, can't seem to find the right words. :chin:

Oops-e!

Former Member

My throat is raw, from fighting
My heart is sore, from lying
My eyes are stained, from crying
I can't do this anymore.

Your photos ripped up on the floor
There's emptiness where love was before
Honey, if you could see me now,
It'd chill you to your core!
It'd chill you to your core!

You said the grass was greener,
That your new life was sweeter
You left behind,
the simple times
I never was a dreamer

My throat is raw, from fighting
My heart is sore, from lying
My eyes are stained, from crying
I can't do this anymore.



And that's as far as I can get at this time in the morning, I'll do some mote later. I have a tune in my head so if my throat isn't too bad I'll do a youtube vid for you :thumb:

Former Member

Wow BA, that's pretty impressive song writing skills you have.

Former Member

It was alright for 6 in the morning I suppose

Reena

WOW BA! Fab lyrics. Can I just suggest;

My throat is raw, from shouting
My heart is sore, from fighting
My eyes are stained, from crying
I can't do this anymore.

Your photos ripped up on the floor
There's emptiness where love was before
Honey, if you could see me now,
It'd chill you to your core!
It'd chill you to your core!

You said the grass was greener,
That your new life was sweeter
You left behind,
the simple times
I never was a dreamer

My throat is raw, from shouting
My heart is sore, from fighting
My eyes are stained, from crying
I can't do this anymore.

And what about fitting this in somewhere?
I just watched you walk away, slip away, fade away.

Can't wait to hear your tune for it, want to see if it's the same as in my head. xx :wave: