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Hands to hold and hands that choke

Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
another song:), this ones about being in a relationship where you feel smothered and choked

VERSE:
I can't stay in a place where I'm choked
these words I write are the truth
and yet I'm ashamed to say them
your best is yet to come
so don't wait around for me because
Every time I've lied to a face I loved

Chorus:
I've had alot of drinks and alot of time
and I know you wish I were a better man
but it all comes down to a simple fact
there are hands to hold and hands that choke
yours have changed since the first day
please don't frown because it'll come back around

VERSE:
I wish I could be a better man
instead I keep on running
from a place I feel trapped in
my day has come and gone
so its time for me to move on because
Every time I've lied to a face I loved

Chorus:
I've had alot of drinks and alot of time
and I know you wish I were a better man
but it all comes down to a simple fact
there are hands to hold and hands that choke
yours have changed since the first day
please don't frown because it'll come back around


Its a pretty short song, its acoustic and well I hope you guys like it
anything I could improve on it?

Comments

  • RichTBiscuitRichTBiscuit ********* Posts: 14 Confirmed not a robot
    I like it. You touched on quite a lot of emotions there! Maybe add a final verse with some kinda of look to the future? I like reflective songs a lot, especially when they end on something positive.
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    Another one of your amazing songs, are you planning to get them published? x
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    probably not, if I ever get a decent singer or a band that doesn't screw me around I'll hopefully get round to recording these but as of yet havn't found either
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