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Good Friends Become Great Enemys (a song of course)
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VERSE:
The clock strikes one, two, three and four
You’ll keep it up cos you don’t know how to stop
You’ve shown your teeth, you can’t take it back
True colours are shining bright and hot
Melting the frost in hell
Its not like its a secret anymore
CHORUS:
I Keep on finding all the things you throw away
I’m beating myself up over this
They lead in a trail right to my door
How did you think you wouldn’t get caught
so I’ve got some good news
You’ve been found out mate
Thats right You’ve been busted
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This is all that I've got so far, gonna write a bit more of it tomorrow but just wondered what people think of it. Its gonna be a fast paced adtr/fys style song
The clock strikes one, two, three and four
You’ll keep it up cos you don’t know how to stop
You’ve shown your teeth, you can’t take it back
True colours are shining bright and hot
Melting the frost in hell
Its not like its a secret anymore
CHORUS:
I Keep on finding all the things you throw away
I’m beating myself up over this
They lead in a trail right to my door
How did you think you wouldn’t get caught
so I’ve got some good news
You’ve been found out mate
Thats right You’ve been busted
__________________________
This is all that I've got so far, gonna write a bit more of it tomorrow but just wondered what people think of it. Its gonna be a fast paced adtr/fys style song
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I really like the first verse, but I am not so sure about the chorus.. especially the last two lines.
I wasn't to sure about those 2 myself, just not sure what I can really put instead
I’m beating myself up over this
They lead a trail right to my door
How did you think you wouldn’t get caught
so I’ve got some news for you
You’ve been found out (*maybe hold the out, so it's really long*)
Don't show your face round here again
... That works for the tune I'm singing it to, which is probably mega different to yours. x
they sounds awesome and fits damn near perfectly to the tune I'm thinking
Thanks
not only great minds, pretty Damn AWESOME minds
Thanks
The clock strikes one, two, three and four
You’ll keep it up cos you don’t know how to stop
You’ve shown your teeth and you can’t take it back
Your true colours are shining bright
Melting the frost in hell
Its not like its a secret anymore
CHORUS:
I Keep on finding all the things you throw away
I’m beating myself up over this
They lead in a trail right to my door
How did you think you wouldn’t get caught
so I’ve got some good news
You’ve been found out
Don't show your face around here again
VERSE:
Todays the day I start this war
Let me ask this what the hell are you waiting for
Your chance to stab me in the back
Has been and gone so what are you waiting for
So try to move alittle faster
Cause I'm coming up fast
Ready to take what I can get
CHORUS:
I Keep on finding all the things you throw away
I’m beating myself up over this
They lead in a trail right to my door
How did you think you wouldn’t get caught
so I’ve got some good news
You’ve been found out
Don't show your face around here again
Mid:
I'll keep on coming back for more
because thats what you did to me
You killed my heart but you left the brain
CHORUS:
I Keep on finding all the things you throw away
I’m beating myself up over this
They lead in a trail right to my door
How did you think you wouldn’t get caught
so I’ve got some good news
You’ve been found out
Don't show your face around here again
VERSE:
Pick yourself up off the ground
So I can look you in the eye as I twist,
The knife you stuck in my so many,
times before with the malice you once held
You've been found
Way in over your head
With no-one to drag you out
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Finished version, rewritten a few bits and think that its mostly coherent, what do you guys think?