Lyrics (HELP ME!!)

Former Member

Okay.. I agreed to write lyrics for my mates band. It's a screamo band, and they are all boys. My lyrics seem a bit girly so if anyone has any advice/Ideas it'd be much appreciated!
These are some I have already:

Falling won’t help me now
But I aint ready to stand my ground
Just catch me if I drown
Promise you’ll catch me if I drowned

We can reach high
But without you I’ll reach higher
Maybe it weren’t always like this
But sure as hell, it’s now burnt on fire

My heart started beating slowly
But now it’s stopped
And I’m oh so lonely
‘Cos everything else has dropped (me)

Falling won’t help me now
But I aint ready to stand my ground
Just catch me if I drown
Promise you’ll catch me if I drowned

The promises I made
They were only to keep me sane
Didn’t mean anything anyway
Only enforced to hide my pain

One day, you never know
To reality I may go
I’ll venture into the real world
But, honey it’s doubtful
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Nothing is all that’s left, but it’s more than what was there
Moments are to treasure- but don’t hold on forever
One day you’re gonna let go, then what?
Who knows.
You’re gonna be alone...

What the fuck is saving us now?
SOS, but our souls have already gone
Holding on to something that aint real,
Living in fear
Of crumbling...
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I’m so sick of my skin
Let me out let me out.
But let me in! let me in!
To yours
Think of the things that we could be
Together, not forever, but you can save me.

The mirror is shattered
And the pieces are painful
But we can’t fix it now
Not even with hope and passion
Maybe with blood and tears
But we’ll find out how?

And let me in! Let me in!
To yours
Feed our pain
Together we’ll be sane
Inside each other’s insanity
Let me in!
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They are just rough ideas, but I am finding it hard to write something for a guy.
Thanks,
Xx

Former Member

there good, but which bits are screamed and which are sung?? i wouldn't say their 2 girly, but for me they don't seem to be screamo lyrics, probs because idk which bits are screamed but i like them

Former Member

Cheers, I dunno which bits he is going to scream.. he just told me to write lyrics! So, I have nothing to work with really.
Xx

Former Member

Wow those lyrics look really good how they are. Well done!
I wish I could write stuff like that! Bet you're looking forward to the final song!

Former Member

Yeah I am looking forward to hearing what they come up with... I might post the final lyrics to some songs on here, I still haven't finished any yet though!
Thanks for the possitive comments :-)
Xx