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My lyrics..

Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
what do you think??
the bands a sort of mixture of influences of bands like alexisonfire, a day to remeber but with out the screaming, we're thinking of doing that but in alexisonfire style so u can understand

heres the first song i've written for us
Lets Toast the Rich (with our favourite drink)
VERSE 1:
I?ve got to let go
Fight back instead of holding on
this system is killing us
I?ll never be the same
Nothing ever will be
let?s raise the stacks and

CHORUS:
Lets toast the rich
With our favourite drink
Rise your glasses
Burn down the streets
Listen to the beats
And burn the streets

VERSE 2:
I?ve got to get out of this
good bye for a life time
theres no point in staying
when all that happens is
Just our downfall
so let?s raise the stacks

CHORUS:
Lets toast the rich
With our favourite drink
Rise your glasses
Burn down the streets
Listen to the beats
And burn the streets

VERSE 3:
I?m looking at the mess
that they?ve made
We?ll make our stand
right with our friends
fuck the rich
We?ll make our stand
right with our friends

CHORUS:
Lets toast the rich
With our favourite drink
Rise your glasses
Burn down the streets
Listen to the beats
And burn the streets

tell me what u think and if i can improve anything

Probaly should have put this in creative thread, my bad, if an admin could move it if they want

Comments

  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    not my cup of tea but keep writing its good too let the soul ouze onto paper to realise the shaded vigours of the mind. :thumb:
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    Way too liberally and emo for my liking. All the best.
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    Way too liberally and emo for my liking. All the best.

    emo??? really, fair enough, don;t really class them as emo
    but i do see liberally lyrics, and anti estbilashment lyrics
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    I don't like them... To be honest, I don't like alexisonfire etc. either though. They don't seem to be anything new or different. They just sound like the lyrics to thousands of songs all written by rebels without a cause who know they hate conformity but don't really know why... That said, those thousands of songs are quite popular so maybe it's just me who thinks that...
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    fair enough
    everyones allowed their own opionon even if it is wrong :P
    lol
    nah i'm still writting lyrics but i've got more of my own style now, i think
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    Down with Thatcher.
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    It's like something a 15 year old would write.

    "this system is killing us" and "fuck the rich" :D

    There are better ways of making a class statement than that but yeh, all the best. Especially if you're doing live gigs, no one really knows or gives a fuck about the lyrics so as long as you're playing good music then go for it. :thumb:
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    well, 16 so its close enough
    :P
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    For your age its not bad, there is something nice about listening to simple lyrics - life is a lemon is an example.

    Keep on writing and eventually things will come to you and remember that most major musi artists write and rewrite songs before they are released :)

    All in all not bad lyrics for a first attempt!
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,324 The Mix Honorary Guru
    There not bad for a first go!

    My bf writes lyrics and he's been doing it for years and he still has to re-write and re-write songs...so for a first go there not bad. You will become more developed over time!
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