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Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
edited March 27 in Work & Study
Hi..well some of you may remember that I have applied for a media course specialising in journalism to start in September.

I got a letter saying I had got through to the next stage of applications, and have to submit an essay (not a problem) and a practical or professional peice of media work.

I presumed that a web page would be okay for this, so I have messed about and made a web page to submit..

so if anyone wants to take a look and say what is good/bad about it, I would be very gratfeul!
http://home.btclick.com/keith.rawlinson/katy/UCE.htm
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  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    kt
    Honestly? OK, the layout and pix are all fine, but I think you are brave to submit a review, simply because they are so hard to do well. The first thing that struck me about it is the constant repetiton of Blood brothers and Willy Russell, try and find other ways of saying this - the writer, he etc.
    Secondly you are quite laid back in the way you write, if you look at reviews in the paper or magazines, they are totally different to the way you have written - I'm not saying it's crap because it isn't, yet at the same time it's not showing to the best of your ability that you understand the media.
    There are also the little details it would take you two minutes to find out and include - the ticket cost, for example.
    I think you might be better off including one of your advice articles such as campus safety or spiked drinks.

    *Is scared that sounded harsh*

    Saying all that, if you do decide to use the review then just tweak it a bit...and it'll proably be OK.

    Susie

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  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    No I do not mind being harsh, that is better than lying and saying "oh it's wonderful". I will take your comments into consideration.

    I have loads of articles I have written so it is no problem to find a more suitable one, I was more worried about the layout and stuff (I figured they can find out my writing skills from the essay?)

    I will be so pissed off if I don't get in after all this hassle.

    thanks for the advice.
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    I think its really good what did u make it in?
  • Former MemberFormer Member Posts: 1,876,323 The Mix Honorary Guru
    The layout really is good, your site is good and most of the stuff of yours I've seen in the past has been good, it is just so much easier to criticise a review - that's all <IMG SRC="smile.gif" border="0" ALT="icon">
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